I happen to like the way the last post shows the beginnings of the mystery of the Phantom Train. We start to transition to the world of the surreal. I worked very hard on the details of the kids, and I like the way I portrayed some of their actions. That said, I sometimes wonder if the conversations are stilted.
Back when I first wrote this, these two characters were the ones who changed the least. They were always brother and sister, twins and acted pretty much the same to one another. Being an only child, I tried my best to guess how they'd tease each other from things I saw with my friends who had siblings. When I ask children about what they think about the characters they say they really like them.
The fog and the tunnel itself were one of the earliest images for the train I had in mind. I knew I had to have something spooky, a big cavern and and empty train line for the train to prowl. Originally the kids were there with a schoolyard bully who had dared them to walk inside and then back but I later changed it and removed that character. I added other things as technology progressed their camera became a digital one, though I wonder if it should change to a phone now that most kids have those. It amazes me just how quickly things can age a book.
Overall I still enjoy how this chapter looks, and I cant wait to finish posting it.
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